Could be great with work. Not once was the word quiet spelled correctly. The word meet was spelled meat. The concept is good but it needs some heavy editing. It feels like it was written in another language and then translated to english by someone who isn't a native english speaker. Also there isn't too much zombie fighting, and making the wrong choice could cause you to have to start over which isn't really fun. The story wasn't bad and I really liked that it feels like a game with the tasks and different areas.
PLS CONTINUE!!! The story is too good! You cant just end it like that! We need a season 3! Anyways goodjob on the style of the game and plot. Hoping the nxt one will come out soon.
I'll give 3 stars, for now. . because the idea is amazing. Plus I love 'which-way' books. I mean no offense when I say, the grammar is atrocious. The story seems too short in ways & lacks in certain detail as well. Please take this as constructive critisism. Other than that, thus far, are my only opinions. I honestly feel you have a strong foundation to start building off of with this. Yet as I said, proof read and spell check is a must & more detail. Draw the readers in to where it's like you are painting a vivid image in our minds. Because, since I am being honest, I got bored a few times.
Conflicted love Im not a fan of zombies but i do LOVE this story XD The characters back and forth jokes are very natural feeling and i love the all the characters but most of all Johnny because come on katanas will always be epically cool lol. I hope you get a chance to write the third arc, no matter how long it takes.
Good Idea, Poor Execution This story is nearly unreadable. It has the appearance of being rushed to completion to meet deadlines because no one proofread any of the content. That's a huge issue considering it's a text-based game. Grammar and spelling errors abound, but that's not where it ends. Many sentences are almost indecipherable due to lack of description or flaws in structure. The content of the sentences is bland and nondescript as well. Overall, I commend the idea for it's potential, but this screams, "minimal effort."
Decent, poor grammar. Good concept, I'm a big fan of zombies so I liked this straight away. The only thing that is annoying is the spelling and grammar. It feels rushed and that it hasn't had a proof read at all. Fix the pretty often spelling and grammar mistakes, add some illustrations and you got yourself a winner.
- fixed few issues