
Tor Kak
I wish I could have given it a higher rating. However too many grammar, punctuation and spelling errors can make it a hard read for most. There were several times I made a selection, and then when reading the outcome of that selection, I found the narrative giving me the results of what I selected and another result right after, one that I did not select. I did enjoy the read
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A filthy casual.
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The game is okay, has a lot of potential, but it needs a lot more polish, especially with the text. The text is hard to read, as most of the time it's all an incredibly long wall of text. It also has some spelling mistakes as well. The dialogue needs more polish. It's missing proper punctuation and capitalization, and reads more like a bad fanfiction. It has potential, but it's brought down by its lack of polish and its first draft syndrome. With more editing and polish, this story will shine.
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Lazer Fluxxy
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Personally,I feel it's a pretty alright story , I can certainly see it has love put into it. The main problem is it feels like the writer/developer had not enough time to refine the other aspects, there are quite often Grammar and Spelling mistakes ,which is understandable with such a large piece of writing,but still the point remains.
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